The Clockwork Surgeon

The Clockwork Surgeon

Steam hisses through copper veins…
ticking, clicking, time’s domain—
My child lies still, breathing strained
on tables cold, by gears sustained.

The chronometer counts each beat,
each wheeze, each flutter incomplete…
Whilst I, magniloquent in my defeat,
wind mechanisms obsolete.

Tick-tock, tick-tock…
the grandfather clock
Measures moments I cannot stop,
each second precious… about to drop.

‘Ere in this gaslit surgery,
where brass and steel dance surgically,
I play at God—but can’t you see?
The hubris burns… eternally.

Steam engines pump the bellows’ breath,
mechanical lungs staving off death…
But what am I? A modern Prometheus?
Or just a father… powerless?

The penny-farthing wheels of fate
turn steady, clicking… never late.
Each gear engaged to calculate
how long before it’s… too late.

Glass vials gleam like crystal spheres,
reflecting back my desperate fears…
The music box plays through my tears—
a funeral march… for stolen years.

Whirr-click, whirr-click…
the cardiac tick
Of this contraption… grown too sick
to mend what time and trauma pick.

I built this world of cogs and steam,
believing science could redeem…
But now I know—it’s all a dream.
The clockwork heart… won’t beat again.

The zeppelin drifts beyond the pane,
whilst here I work… in vain, in vain.
My child’s face pale… forever stained
by my mechanical… refrain.

Tick… tick… tick…
The silence thick.
The grandfather clock… has stopped its click.
And I am left… with nothing but…

the echo of my making.

Bob Lynn | © 2025 Vox Meditantis. All rights reserved.

15 responses to “The Clockwork Surgeon”

  1. poetisatinta avatar

    Bob, this has potent imagery, with emotional undercurrent – very powerful piece 🙌

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    1. Bob Lynn avatar

      Thank you so much! I’m delighted the imagery struck you as vivid – that steam-powered medical world felt very real to me as I was writing it. The blend of Victorian mechanical wonder with such profound human struggle was both fascinating and heartbreaking to explore. Really appreciate your thoughtful response! 🙏

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      1. poetisatinta avatar

        You are very welcome Bob 😊

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  2. tidalscribe.com avatar

    I love your imagery and unusual take on artificial means of preserving life.

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    1. Bob Lynn avatar

      Thank you! I’m so glad the imagery came through strongly for you. The idea of using those beautiful Victorian mechanical devices in such a desperate medical context felt like the perfect collision between wonder and tragedy – all that intricate clockwork trying to substitute for the most natural thing in the world. Really appreciate your kind words!

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  3. Ben avatar

    Bob, …an entwined telling. Weaving through metaphors of time, gears, mechanisms, and steam – attempting to make sense of that found within impossibilities of reality; moving.

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    1. Bob Lynn avatar

      Thank you Ben – the mechanical metaphors felt perfect for exploring that impossible collision between scientific ambition and human limitation.

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  4. writingwhatnots avatar

    A powerful combination of desperation and technology. The detail brings the picture to life, invoking a bygone age – like an old film whirring on an old projector.

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    1. Bob Lynn avatar

      Thank you! That projector analogy is perfect – I wanted that flickering, sepia-tinted Victorian atmosphere to frame this modern tragedy.

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  5. ben Alexander avatar

    Bob, this one really devastated me. That line “whilst here I work… in vain, in vain” hit me especially hard. The pacing, like the surgeon’s clockwork, is relentless and aching.

    Much love,
    David

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    1. Bob Lynn avatar

      Thank you David – that repetition was meant to echo a father’s desperate mantra. I’m moved that the poem’s rhythm captured such pain.

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  6. ben Alexander avatar

    hi, Bob 💗

    Just wanna let you know that this week’s W3, hosted by our beloved Lesley, is now live:

    W3 Prompt #169: Wea’ve Written Weekly

    Enjoy❣️

    Much love,
    David

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    1. Bob Lynn avatar

      Thank you David – I’ll be sure to take a look at it later.

      Best wishes,

      Bob x

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